Douglas Smith
8 Ways to Make Your Direct Marketing
Copy Work Harder
(MarketingProfs.com tutorial, February 2002)
In direct marketing campaigns - the kind designed to provoke a
response of some kind - creative often takes a back seat to other
factors. In the 60-20-20 rule (or any of its countless variations),
Audience is essential ... Offer is Everything ... Creative is
merely Compulsory.
Fine. Nevertheless, Copy is still King. Here's why: without good copy,
your perfectly-targeted audience might never understand that wonderful
offer of yours - or, even if they're suitably impressed, may not
summon up the energy to do anything about it.
So whether you're penning an e-blast yourself, or reviewing your
agency's draft of an upcoming self-mailer, it pays to know the difference
between highly effective copy - the kind that commands high response
rates - and the kind that just speeds your campaign's journey to
the recycle bin.
Nailed your lists? Got an irresistible offer? Great. Here are 8 ways
to make sure the copy does its job, too.
1. Make your copy approachable. Even great copy won't work
if people don't read it - so present everything in digestible,
"bite-size" chunks:
- Split up any paragraph that exceed 3 lines in length...

- Present key selling concepts as series of bullets...

- Use ellipses ("...") - both within sentences and at the end of
serial bullets - to keep the reader's eye moving...

- Sprinkle the page (or screen) with subheads (preferably bold or
underlined, unless you're working in text-only e-mail).

- Add more bold and underline treatments wherever
important ideas lurk (remember, some readers skim ONLY the big-and-bold;
others may decide to read more, but only if these highly-visible ideas
draw them in).
Ultimately, your page or screen should be at least 45% white space
(and more is almost always better). Does this mean you'll spend more
on paper? Maybe, but the increased response rates will more than cover
any additional costs. Worried about forcing online readers to scroll? As
long as a call to action and hyperlink are visible at all times, physical
copy length won't hurt you. It's the readability that counts.
2. Present the call to action early - and often. Most
audience members won't read your entire piece; and many skim, or skip
around. It's critical to tell them what to do, then, as soon as possible
(in a letter or e-mail package, no later than the 3rd paragraph). Briefly
describe the offer, then tell readers to respond (and how to do so).
After that first call to action, give readers a few more reasons to
respond - then tell them again (and tell them how again). If your
copy is long (multiple pages or screens), always keep a call to action
in sight. And because many readers look first at a letter's opening and
close, always use the P.S. to tell readers precisely what to do.
3. Benefits first. Let's assume you're already sold on the value
of communicating benefits over features. In direct response copy, there's
an important trick that has to do with the way people skim these pieces:
in nearly every phrase or sentence, express a benefit (of responding, or
of using your product or service) - and write that benefit first.
Wrong: "Graphical, point-and-click user interface saves hours
of your valuable time." (feature mentioned first)
Right: "Save valuable hours on a wide range of tasks, thanks
to an easy-to-use, point-and-click interface." (benefit mentioned
first)
4. Sell the offer, not the product. Whatever your campaign
offers the target audience - a free information packet, an
instructive Web seminar, a gift for visiting a trade show booth -
concentrate on selling the benefits of responding and receiving the
offer. (Why? Because your goal of your campaign is getting the person
to respond, period.)
Selling the product may or may not be achievable (or even advisable)
in the space your piece allows - especially if it's a big-ticket
item. If you can just get someone interested enough to respond to the
offer, you can then leave the real selling to your sales force. Plus
you can always include your product brochure in that free info pack.
Wrong: "Send for your free packet and discover the powerful
benefits of the Acme Integrated Infrastructure Miracle Suite." (selling
the product)
Right: "Send for your free packet and learn how companies like
yours are already trimming costs, boosting morale, and earning higher
test scores for their kids." (selling the offer)
5. Voice: be the helpful colleague your reader has been looking
for. Most people like to take positive action, but many need
encouragement. Everything about your copy should provide that helping
hand. Here are two ways to find the right "voice:"
- Use second person ("you") language. Don't talk about yourself,
your company, or its products - talk to the reader, about the reader.
Wrong: "Our matchless products and services can help
you increase productivity..." (talking about you and your
products)
Right: "You'll eliminate hours of tedious labor every week,
simply by..." (talking about the reader, and benefits to the
reader)
- Keep it action-oriented. Repeatedly describe the reader taking action
("Call today and find out how..."). Communicate concepts and benefits
in active terms:
Wrong: "These tools can really improve your bottom
line..." (this is about your tools)
Right: "You can rake in more revenues and slash costs..."
(this is about the reader)
- Stick to active language (it's easier to read, and it works to
stimulate the kind of action you like: responses to your offer).
Wrong: "Our product is used in more than 300 companies in 20
countries." (passive voice invites drowsiness)
Right: "Call center managers are already using the Acme Solution
to crank up productivity in more than 300 companies worldwide." (active
voice plus action-oriented words)
6. Use the Shampoo Formula. Okay, it's a little more complex
than lather, rinse, repeat, but it's a proven winner - and it works
in direct mail letters, brochures, broadcast e-mail messages, even on
splash pages for e-newsletter ad and banner campaigns. Structure your
copy as follows, and you'll reel in the widest possible range of
respondents.
- Acknowledge pain or opportunity

- Offer benefit (ease pain, grab opportunity)

- Call to action

- Offer description & benefit(s)

- Call to action (Note: repeat steps 4 & 5 until you're out of
compelling offer benefits - or space)

- Product mention, brief benefits

- Sweetener (a reason to respond NOW, such as a giveaway or limited-time
discount)

- Summarize benefits of responding (keep it punchy!)

- Call to action
7. Every word counts - but no need to count words. In direct
marketing we can't afford to waste words - but we shouldn't
unnecessarily withhold them, either. Stop writing when you've exhausted
all the most compelling reasons to respond without being repetitive -
and no earlier.
Hold back a few key benefits just to satisfy someone's idea of "ideal
copy length", and you risk losing the reader who was on the fence,
and needed a little more convincing.
8. Take the skimmer test. Finally, go back to the top and read
only the headlines, subheads, and underlined or bold phrases. These
words alone should tell your story - if they don't, adjust as
necessary.
Why bother? We already admitted it - the audience, lists,
media, and offer make the greatest impact on response. So why bother
with all of this? The best reason: money. You'll spend a sizeable chunk
on media, design, and production. Why wouldn't you want to maximize the
return on your investment?